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The Crystal Conspiracy-2

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Hey, I just had a craaaazy idea!  I will also re-post the pseudo blog entries here as well.  Not that those are really important or should be regarded in any way.  But what the heck.  You only live once.

"Hey, you found The Crystal Conspiracy!  That is pretty awesome.  So, this first page doesn't reveal much of the story, except that, well, Crystal is in trouble.  And these four girls have something to do with it.

Now that that inane explanation is out of the way, maybe I can write something about the place that they're in, since that probably won't be explored much in the story.  Being a huge fan of food and eating out, I've designed this place to be a sort of combination of my favorite places to dine.  I like many restaurants for different reasons, so this place is sort of my own personal Holy Grail of dining establishments.  They have a huge selection of beers on tap, and a number of specialty burgers.  On this particular night, burgers and fries are on sale for $4.99 and all draft beers are $1.00 off.  Most people who come here won't order anything like Coors, Miller, or Bud Light because the local brews they offer are much better.  Oh, and they also have fire-roasted pizza and a number of great appetizers like wings and nachos.  Basically, it's your typical all-american restaurant without the frozen-food quality of large chains."

"Personally, I hate it when things are spelled out obviously in dialog, so I'm a little critical of this point in the story, especially since it's right at the beginning.  However, I'm not quite sure how I would have spun it otherwise, so there you go.

Also, you can pretty clearly see that this is a small departure of my usual style since it is so rough.  This is a story that I want to put on paper quickly, and there is no better way I can imagine for this tale than to do it visually, so this comic will have the appearance of being hastily done.  I know most people will argue for quality over quantity, and rightfully so in most cases, but in this case, it's a matter of either getting it done so slowly that not only the people who read it might get frustrated, but I myself might get frustrated and quit at its slow progress.  So there you have it.  Dark pencil lines, and soft shell coloring and shading that doesn't bother to stay within them.  I know that this hasty appearance isn't a total kill joy for many people, so I hope you will be one of those people.  If not, I hope you can at least enjoy the story.  Perhaps for the more "critical" images, I will produce the occasional cleaner page.  But that is still yet to be determined.

And here you meet this character for the first time.  As she is the antagonist, I hope you will grow to both love and hate her.  Like many of the people I write about, she's based on people I know, and this particular character is a combination of one or two of my best friends.  I don't want to give the impression that I think poorly of my friends, so I will say that the neurotic qualities that you will see in her are grossly exaggerated for the purpose of drama and humor.  She is a caricature, as are many of the major players in this story."


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I don't mind the sketchiness so much, but the coloring seems just absurd in these first three pages. Everything looks like it's glowing, and all the girls looks like they're coated in oil; I feel like my glasses must be dirty whenever I look at these pages. I'm probably just being way too critical, and I get that you didn't want to spend too much time on these, but god damn, dude, it would look a lot better with just flat colors, or even no color.

Also, yeah, starting with an exposition dump isn't preferable, but from a writing standpoint, I get that it can be the easier if not preferable way to write it. I understand.